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Makanby

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★★
Not exactly snappy...
This is a bit discursive which could be OK in some situations. For me, it gets a bit bogged down with the bloodwork. If I'm going to go into that much detail, I'd rather be talking about the atmosphere.

Other medical one-liners do it better for me.
Tom Smerlingby

update 5-16-12
Based on the above comment, I moved what had been a very long parable into the "Notes" section, then tried to distill the core message into a bite. Not sure how successful I was, but at least it fits our format better.

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